Here's the planning txt I was working from and updating as I went. The numbers near the beginning are per-scene frame counts where I inserted time pauses (in seconds) in final editing.

You'll see a few differences between this and the final cut. Niobe's "Jesus Christ" line, for instance, got cut because I ended up without a good way to fit it in at the right time while still looking like it was coming from her--making it clear who is saying what is a significant issue when you don't have recorded voices to back you up.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

900 frames, 90 seconds

1a
pause after captions gone

1b
75(end): 2.5

2
1: 2

3a
1: 1
21: 1
40: 0.5
46: 0.5
60: .8
80: 1
82: 1
84: 1
114: 1
115: 1.5
119: 1.5
121: 1
125: 2
145: 2
150: 0.5
152: 3
174: 0.25
175: .5

3b:
107: 1
108: 1

3c:
10(end): 1

3d:
1: 2
2: 3
3: 2
63(end): 5

4a:
1: 1
2: 1
3: 1
79: 1

4b:
11: 0.5
12: 0.5

4c:
1: 0.5
2: 2
3: 1
25: 1
75(end): 2

5
1: 2
10: 1
11: 1
22: 1
23: 0.5
24: 0.5
25: 1
36: 0.5
37: 0.5
46: 1
67: 1
68: 1
69: 0.5
70: 0.5
71: 0.5
72: 1
133: 2
147-151(end): 1


scene 1 (150 frames)
(merv ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300025944 )
(general ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300020669 )
- (~10 frame 11.3 caption overlay)
- close up of computer screen: bip message from merv 11.2.5 ("Wake up.")
- Merv is looking at it in annoyance
- Gen hologram phases in, says they've got the android thing
costume ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300020669
- Merv has him put it up on the holographic display
- Merv looks at it, grins slowly--"impressive..."

~~~~~~
Merovingian.

My Sentinels have completed retrieval of the android.

Ah?

While slightly damaged, it appears to be intact.

As you can see, the mechanisms are complex.

This is not, however, Machine technology.

Impressive...
~~~~~~


scene 2 (90 frames)
(shimada ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/...895#36300474586 )
- shimada, hovercraft deck, looking at face on transmitter screen
- s: how is he?
- f: he won't be winning any beauty pageants, but he'll make it.
we'll be in broadcast range in a few days. do you want me to--?
- s: no. I'll do it

~~~~~~
How is he?

He won't be winning any beauty pageants,
but he'll make it.

We'll be in broadcast range in a few days.
Do you want me to--

No.

I'll do it.
~~~~~~~

scene 3 (300 frames)
- hovercraft, shimada jacked in
- door opens, crafty looking woman creeps up to the chair (100)
- v: they're all off in no-man's land...
- v: nobody to watch over you while you sleep
- v: now where would you hide that code the Oracle gave you...
- crewman appears in doorway, startled: you!
- v grins
- c: stop! (200)
- v yanks shimada's jack out, slices its cable
- v: kept it warm for you, dearie
- v hurls the jack into the crewman's forehead
- crewman collapses as more crew members arrive: veil!
- veil laughs as she vanishes back through the opposite doorway

~~~~~~~
They're all off in no-man's land...

Nobody to watch over you while you sleep.

Now, where would you have hidden that code
the Oracle gave you...
~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
You!

No!

Kept it warm for you, dearie.

- Veil!
- Stop her!
~~~~~~~

scene 4 (200 frames)
- wright floats between skyscrapers, moving slowly over downtown
- gray is watching grimly from a rooftop with another agent, or maybe an operative
- g: the program?
- o: we're picking up blips all over the city. still trying to isolate it, sir.
- g scowls
- o: sir, should we--
- g: no.
- wright floats toward the wall of a skyscraper, it warps inward, making way for her to pass through
- g: keep your men back.
- wright floats out the other side and continues across the city at the same slow, steady speed
- gray scowls even grimmerlerlier
- g: find the program...

~~~~~~~~
And the program?

We're picking up blips all over the city.

Still trying to isolate it, sir.

Sir, should we--
~~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
No.
~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
Keep your men back.

Find the program.
~~~~~~~~

scene 5 (150 frames)
(niobe ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300025614 )
(ghost ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300024976 )
- close up of bip message from merv 11.2.5 ("Wake up.") on a computer screen
- niobe is watching it, with ghost behind her
- n: the interface program?
- the message, which had paused, refreshes
Wake up, Neo. [letters spelling out in sequence]
- n: jesus christ
- the message suddenly floods the entire screen
Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up [...]
- n: ghost--
- ghost is already hyperjumping high above the city, his face set in a determined mask

~~~~~~~
The interface program?

Jesus Christ.

Ghost--
~~~~~~


end (10 frames)
map zooms in on spot in on W Hampton Green

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cloudwolf wrote:

Vinia wrote:

Is Veil sporting a new do?

Remember this is in the real.

Yeah, Chloe already drove that point home earlier. /duh

Rarebit wrote:

Here's the planning txt I was working from and updating as I went. The numbers near the beginning are per-scene frame counts where I inserted time pauses (in seconds) in final editing.

You'll see a few differences between this and the final cut. Niobe's "Jesus Christ" line, for instance, got cut because I ended up without a good way to fit it in at the right time while still looking like it was coming from her--making it clear who is saying what is a significant issue when you don't have recorded voices to back you up.

 

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

 

900 frames, 90 seconds

1a
pause after captions gone

1b
75(end): 2.5

2
1: 2

3a
1: 1
21: 1
40: 0.5
46: 0.5
60: .8
80: 1
82: 1
84: 1
114: 1
115: 1.5
119: 1.5
121: 1
125: 2
145: 2
150: 0.5
152: 3
174: 0.25
175: .5

3b:
107: 1
108: 1

3c:
10(end): 1

3d:
1: 2
2: 3
3: 2
63(end): 5

4a:
1: 1
2: 1
3: 1
79: 1

4b:
11: 0.5
12: 0.5

4c:
1: 0.5
2: 2
3: 1
25: 1
75(end): 2

5
1: 2
10: 1
11: 1
22: 1
23: 0.5
24: 0.5
25: 1
36: 0.5
37: 0.5
46: 1
67: 1
68: 1
69: 0.5
70: 0.5
71: 0.5
72: 1
133: 2
147-151(end): 1


scene 1 (150 frames)
(merv ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300025944 )
(general ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300020669 )
- (~10 frame 11.3 caption overlay)
- close up of computer screen: bip message from merv 11.2.5 ("Wake up.")
- Merv is looking at it in annoyance
- Gen hologram phases in, says they've got the android thing
costume ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300020669
- Merv has him put it up on the holographic display
- Merv looks at it, grins slowly--"impressive..."

~~~~~~
Merovingian.

My Sentinels have completed retrieval of the android.

Ah?

While slightly damaged, it appears to be intact.

As you can see, the mechanisms are complex.

This is not, however, Machine technology.

Impressive...
~~~~~~


scene 2 (90 frames)
(shimada ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/...895#36300474586 )
- shimada, hovercraft deck, looking at face on transmitter screen
- s: how is he?
- f: he won't be winning any beauty pageants, but he'll make it.
we'll be in broadcast range in a few days. do you want me to--?
- s: no. I'll do it

~~~~~~
How is he?

He won't be winning any beauty pageants,
but he'll make it.

We'll be in broadcast range in a few days.
Do you want me to--

No.

I'll do it.
~~~~~~~

scene 3 (300 frames)
- hovercraft, shimada jacked in
- door opens, crafty looking woman creeps up to the chair (100)
- v: they're all off in no-man's land...
- v: nobody to watch over you while you sleep
- v: now where would you hide that code the Oracle gave you...
- crewman appears in doorway, startled: you!
- v grins
- c: stop! (200)
- v yanks shimada's jack out, slices its cable
- v: kept it warm for you, dearie
- v hurls the jack into the crewman's forehead
- crewman collapses as more crew members arrive: veil!
- veil laughs as she vanishes back through the opposite doorway

~~~~~~~
They're all off in no-man's land...

Nobody to watch over you while you sleep.

Now, where would you have hidden that code
the Oracle gave you...
~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
You!

No!

Kept it warm for you, dearie.

- Veil!
- Stop her!
~~~~~~~

scene 4 (200 frames)
- wright floats between skyscrapers, moving slowly over downtown
- gray is watching grimly from a rooftop with another agent, or maybe an operative
- g: the program?
- o: we're picking up blips all over the city. still trying to isolate it, sir.
- g scowls
- o: sir, should we--
- g: no.
- wright floats toward the wall of a skyscraper, it warps inward, making way for her to pass through
- g: keep your men back.
- wright floats out the other side and continues across the city at the same slow, steady speed
- gray scowls even grimmerlerlier
- g: find the program...

~~~~~~~~
And the program?

We're picking up blips all over the city.

Still trying to isolate it, sir.

Sir, should we--
~~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
No.
~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
Keep your men back.

Find the program.
~~~~~~~~

scene 5 (150 frames)
(niobe ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300025614 )
(ghost ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300024976 )
- close up of bip message from merv 11.2.5 ("Wake up.") on a computer screen
- niobe is watching it, with ghost behind her
- n: the interface program?
- the message, which had paused, refreshes
Wake up, Neo. [letters spelling out in sequence]
- n: jesus christ
- the message suddenly floods the entire screen
Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up [...]
- n: ghost--
- ghost is already hyperjumping high above the city, his face set in a determined mask

~~~~~~~
The interface program?

Jesus Christ.

Ghost--
~~~~~~


end (10 frames)
map zooms in on spot in on W Hampton Green

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I wish I understood Flash better.

Rarebit wrote:

- gray scowls even grimmerlerlier

Great word!

Vinia wrote:

cloudwolf wrote:

Vinia wrote:

Is Veil sporting a new do?

Remember this is in the real.

Yeah, Chloe already drove that point home earlier. /duh

I had some fun coming up with how Veil and Shimada would look in the Real. I didn't want to give them radically altered bodies or anything like that, but Veil looks different without her glasses and makeup, she's probably a little leaner or more wirey, which was an attempt to give her a more "Real-istic" physique--showing muscles from hard exercise and a thinner face from maybe subsisting on synthesized chicken-flavor, and I thought it would be an interesting contrast too to give her short dark hair in the Real, vs the long white hair on her RSI, and her costume is black rather than white, and doesn't have any non-utilitarian additions like flowing coat tails or high heels. It is quite a bit different from the usual redpill garb, though, which also serves to illustrate that her source of equipment is not Zion.

Shimada's costume is closer to the standard torn sweater and dark sailor pants Zion sported in the movies, except that I couldn't resist giving her more stylish pants that are closer to her RSI. I didn't change her hair length as much as Veil's--only shortened it a bit--but pulled it back in a ponytail so that it looks different--you see her forehead rather than her RSI's long even-cut bangs, which I thought gave her a more hm monkish or at least serious appearance--and more suited to wearing on a combat ship.

You know, If they had the same looks, I wouldn't have really have really thought much on it, but I'm very glad that you (and the others who had to remind me) remembered this detail and really gave them an appropriate look.

Rarebit wrote:

I had some fun coming up with how Veil and Shimada would look in the Real. I didn't want to give them radically altered bodies or anything like that, but Veil looks different without her glasses and makeup, she's probably a little leaner or more wirey, which was an attempt to give her a more "Real-istic" physique--showing muscles from hard exercise and a thinner face from maybe subsisting on synthesized chicken-flavor, and I thought it would be an interesting contrast too to give her short dark hair in the Real, vs the long white hair on her RSI, and her costume is black rather than white, and doesn't have any non-utilitarian additions like flowing coat tails or high heels. It is quite a bit different from the usual redpill garb, though, which also serves to illustrate that her source of equipment is not Zion.

I love your interpretation of Veil. Really conforms to her impish/tomcat-like personality. And the way you did her grins reminded me (somehow) of Mad Pierout... I really dig it.

In fact, everything from this video except for the short clip of the Merovingian turning around and Uggo Transmission Face Man, I really enjoyed. Top three bits:

1)  Veil's jack attack (for da combatz animation quality)

2) Wake up, Neo_ spam (really dramatic)

3) Gray's companion's jaw drop

You left out Ghost's flying pig-face. </3

I thought it was alright. Fast enough not to linger for analytical eyes (unlike the Merv's "lol my arm has a lag of its own"), and even so it's not ugly looking. Though maybe it's me, but it sometimes looks like he's grinning when he's flyin' off..

Heh yeah, that Merv turn was the very first thing I actually tried animating. He took a big risk going first. ;D

Rarebit wrote:

Heh yeah, that Merv turn was the very first thing I actually tried animating. He took a big risk going first. ;D

 

Oops, that's not quite right. I did his eyeballs and the General's arm before that.

Took these while I was working on the third scene. Was thinking I'd put them in whatever the latest "desktop" thread is when the cinematic came out, but probably better just to keep them in here under the SPOILER umbrella.

You'll notice that the first one shows the close-up of Veil's eye in a position I didn't end up using.

Rarebit wrote:

Here's the planning txt I was working from and updating as I went. The numbers near the beginning are per-scene frame counts where I inserted time pauses (in seconds) in final editing.

You'll see a few differences between this and the final cut. Niobe's "Jesus Christ" line, for instance, got cut because I ended up without a good way to fit it in at the right time while still looking like it was coming from her--making it clear who is saying what is a significant issue when you don't have recorded voices to back you up.

 

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

 

900 frames, 90 seconds

1a
pause after captions gone

1b
75(end): 2.5

2
1: 2

3a
1: 1
21: 1
40: 0.5
46: 0.5
60: .8
80: 1
82: 1
84: 1
114: 1
115: 1.5
119: 1.5
121: 1
125: 2
145: 2
150: 0.5
152: 3
174: 0.25
175: .5

3b:
107: 1
108: 1

3c:
10(end): 1

3d:
1: 2
2: 3
3: 2
63(end): 5

4a:
1: 1
2: 1
3: 1
79: 1

4b:
11: 0.5
12: 0.5

4c:
1: 0.5
2: 2
3: 1
25: 1
75(end): 2

5
1: 2
10: 1
11: 1
22: 1
23: 0.5
24: 0.5
25: 1
36: 0.5
37: 0.5
46: 1
67: 1
68: 1
69: 0.5
70: 0.5
71: 0.5
72: 1
133: 2
147-151(end): 1


scene 1 (150 frames)
(merv ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300025944 )
(general ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300020669 )
- (~10 frame 11.3 caption overlay)
- close up of computer screen: bip message from merv 11.2.5 ("Wake up.")
- Merv is looking at it in annoyance
- Gen hologram phases in, says they've got the android thing
costume ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300020669
- Merv has him put it up on the holographic display
- Merv looks at it, grins slowly--"impressive..."

~~~~~~
Merovingian.

My Sentinels have completed retrieval of the android.

Ah?

While slightly damaged, it appears to be intact.

As you can see, the mechanisms are complex.

This is not, however, Machine technology.

Impressive...
~~~~~~


scene 2 (90 frames)
(shimada ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/...895#36300474586 )
- shimada, hovercraft deck, looking at face on transmitter screen
- s: how is he?
- f: he won't be winning any beauty pageants, but he'll make it.
we'll be in broadcast range in a few days. do you want me to--?
- s: no. I'll do it

~~~~~~
How is he?

He won't be winning any beauty pageants,
but he'll make it.

We'll be in broadcast range in a few days.
Do you want me to--

No.

I'll do it.
~~~~~~~

scene 3 (300 frames)
- hovercraft, shimada jacked in
- door opens, crafty looking woman creeps up to the chair (100)
- v: they're all off in no-man's land...
- v: nobody to watch over you while you sleep
- v: now where would you hide that code the Oracle gave you...
- crewman appears in doorway, startled: you!
- v grins
- c: stop! (200)
- v yanks shimada's jack out, slices its cable
- v: kept it warm for you, dearie
- v hurls the jack into the crewman's forehead
- crewman collapses as more crew members arrive: veil!
- veil laughs as she vanishes back through the opposite doorway

~~~~~~~
They're all off in no-man's land...

Nobody to watch over you while you sleep.

Now, where would you have hidden that code
the Oracle gave you...
~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
You!

No!

Kept it warm for you, dearie.

- Veil!
- Stop her!
~~~~~~~

scene 4 (200 frames)
- wright floats between skyscrapers, moving slowly over downtown
- gray is watching grimly from a rooftop with another agent, or maybe an operative
- g: the program?
- o: we're picking up blips all over the city. still trying to isolate it, sir.
- g scowls
- o: sir, should we--
- g: no.
- wright floats toward the wall of a skyscraper, it warps inward, making way for her to pass through
- g: keep your men back.
- wright floats out the other side and continues across the city at the same slow, steady speed
- gray scowls even grimmerlerlier
- g: find the program...

~~~~~~~~
And the program?

We're picking up blips all over the city.

Still trying to isolate it, sir.

Sir, should we--
~~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
No.
~~~~~~~

~~~~~~~
Keep your men back.

Find the program.
~~~~~~~~

scene 5 (150 frames)
(niobe ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300025614 )
(ghost ref: http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/..._id=36300024976 )
- close up of bip message from merv 11.2.5 ("Wake up.") on a computer screen
- niobe is watching it, with ghost behind her
- n: the interface program?
- the message, which had paused, refreshes
Wake up, Neo. [letters spelling out in sequence]
- n: jesus christ
- the message suddenly floods the entire screen
Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up Wake up [...]
- n: ghost--
- ghost is already hyperjumping high above the city, his face set in a determined mask

~~~~~~~
The interface program?

Jesus Christ.

Ghost--
~~~~~~


end (10 frames)
map zooms in on spot in on W Hampton Green

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I don't understand the "flash" mumbo jumbo, but all of the reference just shot me back into my seat. That really closed a lot of mystery holes for me. Straight Awesome!