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The Year the Agents Took the Pine
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Femme Fatale

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Very nice!  SMILEY

 

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Systemic Anomaly

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(Sweeeeeet. You could get paid for writing fiction. Oh... wait SMILEY)



Systemic Anomaly

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Bravo!



Jacked Out

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Sweet as Rare.



Jacked Out

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1) This was very entertaining.

2) I wish the NBA Finals were instead The NBA Final. 

3) That was interesting how you show that perfection in teamwork exceeds individual perfection with respect to the Agents.  It is nice to read a story that deals with the Matrix through the perspective of a bluepill, and that doesn't involve guns.  I particularly liked the coach character, as I think most people who have played sports throughout their lives have had at least one coach just like that.

4) I think as a bluepill I would probably be closer to 'rejecting the simulation' by having a pro basketball team go a full season without any drug charges/domestic charges/DWI's/assault charges/whiny superstars than by having a team go a full season without missing a single shot.

5) Next time you combine Agents and basketball, could you make a story where a guy who goes 0-8 in the first half turns into an Agent at halftime while at the drinking fountain and then proceeds to come back and score about 30 points?  Wait, I was 0-7 at the half last night, not 0-8.

6) Also for next time, could you make it so Shaq is in the story and gets Agent-chopped everytime he starts backing up like he does in the post?

 

Great story, thanks.



Systemic Anomaly

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They should hire you to write and direct the Space Jam Sequel.



Ascendent Logic

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Very friggin good! Love it, more! SMILEY

 

 



Systemic Anomaly

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Best used 25 min. of my year so far. SMILEY

Gripping, excellent story Rarebit.


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