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 08/21/2006 20:12:05
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Jacked Out
Joined: Aug 18, 2005
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Behold the wretched
The burning black
Here is the eye
Staring back
Look away, young child
Look away for fear
And doubt
Come ever forward
While life retreats
Here on the edge of all things
Backwards though the sky may seem
One must look up
To see the total dream
But flames in the air
And there is an eye
See that I see you
At the turn of the tide
At the end of all things
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08/22/2006 04:27:10
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Systemic Anomaly
Joined: Aug 16, 2005
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Simply excellent!
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08/26/2006 07:30:19
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Systemic Anomaly
Joined: Oct 29, 2005
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in the Words of that dude from the film i saw "Whoa"
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08/26/2006 07:45:52
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Perceptive Mind
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  Nice Read!
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08/26/2006 22:16:29
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Systemic Anomaly
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Nice stuff. I particularly like the 4th and 5th stanzas. Very cool vibe... even though, the first time I read it, it reminded me of Lord of the Rings, lol.
Frodo feels relief from the destruction of the Ring but they both realize they will not survive the destruction of the mountain. After Sam's expression of regrets, Frodo takes him in his arms and tells him, "I'm glad to be with you, Samwise Gamgee... here at the end of all things" The screen turns black (and 14 people leave the theater thinking it's over)
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